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Thursday 27 October 2011
Lifecycle of a Mushroom: Third Draft
Slight delay... 95% complete one. There's a glitch with one of the radial wipes, thats already been fixed. Other than that, minor tweaks to the timing following feedback and just the titles and end to go...
I just think that the first time we see the rotating spheres (karyogamy produces diploid nuclei) it comes and goes too quickly for comfort, so I suggest what you do is truncate the concentric circle footage at about 32 secs (actually just after, as there's a natural beat in the music which says 'cut to new scene') and then spend more time with the spheres before we see them divide. It might take a bit of shuffling, but that long concentric circle sequence does give you some wriggle room.
Everything else, timing wise, feels pretty comfortable to me. Just wondered if, on some of the text inserts, if you could add in a moment of shake - not much, but just to lend some 'projection' shake? It's hardly important or deal-breaking - but that shake + some blur as if the focus is slipping might lend some additional authenticity - particularly on the opening titles, and on those shorter text inserts?
Anyway - it's looking great, and it makes me smile every time. I'm smiling now!
So nearly there, Tom :)
ReplyDeleteI just think that the first time we see the rotating spheres (karyogamy produces diploid nuclei) it comes and goes too quickly for comfort, so I suggest what you do is truncate the concentric circle footage at about 32 secs (actually just after, as there's a natural beat in the music which says 'cut to new scene') and then spend more time with the spheres before we see them divide. It might take a bit of shuffling, but that long concentric circle sequence does give you some wriggle room.
Everything else, timing wise, feels pretty comfortable to me. Just wondered if, on some of the text inserts, if you could add in a moment of shake - not much, but just to lend some 'projection' shake? It's hardly important or deal-breaking - but that shake + some blur as if the focus is slipping might lend some additional authenticity - particularly on the opening titles, and on those shorter text inserts?
Anyway - it's looking great, and it makes me smile every time. I'm smiling now!
still smiling!
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